The Silent Aviator

You're missing the whole point of 1337.

...but there hasn't been any groin injuries yet in that particular story! *ponders what damage the gun could do* "Damage" is an understatement...

Explosions! Violence! Terrorists disintegrating! Seriously, what could be better? Thanks for including me Griffinkeeper, I'm honored. Good work so far. Blood makes the grass grow!!!

Capitalize "America"...NOW! :) Good, well-written poem. A few rythmical inconsistencies, but I don't know if you meant it that way. p.s.-I love techno...

Very good! At first, It actually sounded like a war poem until I read the last lines. I liked that. Well written.

lol. No, unfortunatley, I think the Parris Island DI's would do the ass-whoopin'. :)

Thank you for the advice. I've corrected a few of the mistakes. I'll tackle the rest when I have more time on my hands. By separating the text, do you ...

Wow...well written.

Obviously its suggestive, but content aside, it's pretty good.

Yeah, the sentences are like that for about the first fourth of the work or so, and then the wordi-ness tapers off pretty quickly. But, that's only my personal opinion.

Very good! I'm no grammar expert, but I personaly think that some of the sentences are a bit wordy and have a bit much in terms of descriptions. Nonetheless, I ...

Very good!! Harsh but true portrayal of American culture.

A brief, but good invasion thriller. Well-written. Personally, I would've liked to see more backstory, though. Why are the aliens attacking? What is their "objective"? ...Just my opinion.

The vivid descriptions you used made my stomach turn. Still, though, very good. I agree with many here in that this would've been more successfull as a poem.

Thanks for the critique; good advice. I'll try to implement it in my next work... I didn't really expect this peice to be anything amazing. I was just moody and ...